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Crafting a Killer First Page
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Specifications:

  • fiction writing craft
  • all levels can learn from this workshop
  • 90 minutes (adjustable from 60 minutes to 120 minutes—longer is better)
  • Presentation plus interactive critique of submissions by workshoppers
  • Materials: pre-conference submissions from attendees (not absolutely necessary, but very helpful to your writers), handouts at session of submissions and tutorial material

Three things that workshoppers will learn:

  • the storytelling issues that will stop a professional reader from turning the page
  • how to analyze and recognize storytelling and craft problems
  • how to apply their learning and new analysis skills to their own writing with fresh eyes

The first page of a manuscript is the most critical page in a submission to an agent or an editor—it has to truly compel the reader to turn the page. In this case, those readers are on the jaundiced side, simultaneously looking for a reason to reject the submission and to love it.

These experienced pros have seen so many submissions that they will tell you that they can decide whether or not the manuscript will be worth their time from the first page alone. Many rejections happen after the first paragraph.

The reason is that the first page foreshadows the craftsmanship and storytelling in the rest of the book, and the pros know it.

The Crafting a Killer First Page workshop is “immersion” training in seeing the shortcomings that cripple a manuscript’s first page—and what workshoppers learn applies to subsequent pages, too. They learn by critiquing in class actual writing previously submitted by the workshoppers themselves.

The workshop opens with a brief discussion of how publishing pros assess submissions with quotes from literary agents and publishing editors, and these six vital story ingredients:

  • Story Questions
  • Tension (in the reader, too)
  • Voice
  • Clarity
  • Scene setting
  • Character

Workshoppers then evaluate the first pages of the opening prologues or chapters of manuscripts submitted by attendees before the conference begins. In standard manuscript formatting in which chapters begin about 1/3 of the way down a page, the first page is the first 16-17 lines, double-spaced, 1” margins, 12-point type.

Workshoppers are invited to submit work prior to the workshop (complete first chapters or prologues), although having work critiqued in the workshop is not at all necessary for learning and benefiting.

The presenter extracts the first pages, strips away names, etc., and provides a handout to the workshop consisting of those pages. The class reads a page, then votes on whether or not they were compelled them to turn the page. The vote is perhaps the strongest generator of new insights to all the participants, but especially those who submitted work. In a previous workshop, one writer told me that by the time the class got to his submission he voted against his own first page.

The presenter leads the class in a brief examination of why they did or did not turn the page, and adds his own notes. Then the class moves on to the next submission.

With the quick succession of page after page and the discussion of why or why not the page was turned, workshoppers soon read the pages in a more analytical and quite different way—and this leads to insights on what they should do with their own first pages.

The presenter provides those who submitted their work with his notes on their pages. When the presenter contacts those who have signed up for the workshop to solicit submissions, he also sends a free instructional excerpt (included at the end of this proposal) that focuses on the six vital story ingredients and gives examples of strong writing craft.

 

Experience:

I have taught this workshop at:

  • 2005, 2006 Writer’s Weekend, Seattle, WA
  • 2007, 2009, 2011 Write on the Sound Writers Conference, Edmonds, WA
  • 2007 Murder in the Grove Writers Conference, Boise, ID
  • 2009 Mendocino Coast Writer’s Conference, Mendocino, CA
  • 2011 Willamette Writers Association, Southern Oregon branch
  • 2012 South Coast Writers’ Conference, Gold Beach, OR
  • 2013 Wordstock Festival, Portland, OR
  • 2013 Write on the River Writers Conference, Wenatchee, WA
  • 2014 San Miguel Writers’ Conference, San Miguel de Allende, MX
  • 2014 Idaho Writers’ League Conference, Idaho Falls, ID
  • 2014 Writer Unboxed Unconference, Salem, MA

Summary:

The first page of a manuscript is the most critical page in a submission to an agent or an editor. It has to truly compel the reader to turn the page. Many rejections happen after the first paragraph because the first page foreshadows the craftsmanship and storytelling in the rest of the book, and the pros know it.

This workshop is “immersion” training in recognizing the shortcomings that cripple a manuscript’s first page. You will learn by critiquing writing submitted by fellow workshoppers. Ray contacts those who have signed up for the workshop to solicit submissions and also sends a free instructional excerpt from Flogging the Quill, Crafting a Novel that Sells.

The workshop opens with a discussion of how publishing pros assess submissions and these six vital story ingredients: story questions; tension (in the reader); voice; clarity; scene setting; and character.

Workshoppers submit their opening pages prior to the workshop. Ray extracts the first pages, strips away names, and hands the pages out to the workshop. The class reads a page, then votes on whether or not they were compelled to turn the page. Ray leads the class in discussing why they did or did not turn a page and adds his own notes. With the discussion of why or why not turn the page, workshoppers gain insights on what they can do to craft their own killer first pages. After the workshop, Ray provides those who submitted their work with his notes on their pages.

Credentials:

I operate a book editing and design business, Crrreative Book Editing and Design—I’ve been freelance editing full-length fiction manuscripts for about fourteen years. I also run the “litblog,” Flogging the Quill. I published my writing craft book titled Mastering the Craft of Compelling Storytelling in 2014, a redo of my Flogging the Quill, Crafting a Novel that Sells, 2009 and now out of print.

Bestselling author Tess Gerritsen said this about my book:

  • "For some time now, I've been a fan of "Flogging the Quill," Rhamey's excellent blogsite about the how-to's of writing. Now he's compiled his expertise into a writing guide, and it's a must-have for any novelist--published or aspiring. It's one of the most readable, entertaining books on writing out there."

I’m also a novelist; I’ve published four novels, and have had literary agent representation. My novels are commercial fiction and include speculative fiction; fantasy; and mystery. Samples are at rayrhamey.com.

In screenwriting, I was a story editor for Filmation, Los Angeles, and my screen credits include an adaptation of The Little Engine that Could and 20 half-hour screenplays for animated series.

Websites:

crrreative.com (book editing & design)
floggingthequill.com (blog)
rayrhamey.com (books)

Contact info: ray@rayrhamey.com

© Ray Rhamey 2017   ray (at) rayrhamey (dot) com 206.291.8758  Ashland, Oregon

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